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Jetraymongoose
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« on: October 25, 2009, 06:59:26 pm »

I've been having a really bad time lately, and well my friend has been having a worse time, so I wrote some poetry off the top of my head. It's okay, and I suck at poetry, so if you guys want to criticize the crap out of it, go for it.


Oh why oh why cruel fate!
Alas, somebody who understands everything,
And here on lands wrought of stone and night,
Distance.
Holding two hearts apart
Destroying love.
Alack betwixt distance take
Yonder maiden here out,
In loving compassion,
With two gentle souls.
Land and stone between one,
Water and Ocean betwe'n th' other.
Have'th any sense of dignity Fate?
Breaking up romances to be,
All because a lack of sympathy,
To young hearts be,
Crushing their reality.
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« Reply #1 on: October 25, 2009, 11:05:55 pm »

gosh, that is such utter rubbish!  you suck total mountain oysters.....

Well, that's what I'd say if I didn't like this.  It's pretty good, even though fairly emo-ish.  Though that's to be expected when you are going through rough times.  It is very rare to see people writing with the apostrophes in place of certain letters nowadays.  I applaud you.
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« Reply #2 on: October 25, 2009, 11:35:53 pm »

It is very rare to see people writing with the apostrophes in place of certain letters nowadays.
             That is not true
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That's not true       That isn't true

And yeah, good stuff JRM.
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« Reply #3 on: October 25, 2009, 11:38:38 pm »

ok, let me rephrase.  It's rare to see people writing using apostrophes in in place of letters in words that are not contractions.

better Ralion?
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« Reply #4 on: October 25, 2009, 11:40:23 pm »

I guess.
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« Reply #5 on: October 26, 2009, 07:48:52 am »

It was Hamlet. I've been reading it a lot lately for English class, and well it works.
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