So I wrote some poetry lately and would like some feedback, so please tell me what you think of these. If I write more I'll post it in here as to not make like 5 different threads.
You say you want the world to change,
But youíre not willing to sacrifice.
You want us to make a rallying call,
But you donít even show up.
You say you want me to care about you,
But youíve already thrown your feelings out the window.
You tell me to stay,
But you threw that chance away.
You keep on thinking youíll be a huge star,
But nobody even knows who you are.
You arenít making it anywhere,
But you think youíre something special.
You keep creeping into my thoughts and dreams,
But you donít deserve the starring role.
You keep thinking nothings changed,
But youíve never been more wrong in your life.
Turning Too Fast
The world keeps changing,
And I disagree.
For me to like it,
Itíll cost quite the fee.
I donít have a place in it,
But thatís really alright.
Iíll make my own way,
With pure will and might.
Iíll keep on living just in spite,
Sticking a thorn in the worlds path,
You couldnít be any less right,
You think you can stop me? Donít make me laugh.
A man once said, ďI look at the world and notice itís turning,Ē
Well he was on the right track.
I gave it all my heart,
Just be sure to give it back.
Time plays us all for fools,
It trickles by when you want it to go fast,
Memories begin to fade,
But quickness happens when you want it to last.
Iíve seen many things,
And Iím sick of them all,
The world keeps on turning,
And empires crumble and fall.
Is It Wrong?
Is it wrong that I miss you?
Is it wrong to say Iím okay when Iím not?
Itís been a month and I havenít slept a wink,
All our time together, to forget it with a blink.
What I wouldnít give for a second chance,
Or at least the next part of the first one.
Iím ready to pick up the shambles of my life,
But it was already like this before.
Is it wrong to want to see you?
Is it wrong to keep on believing things will be okay?
Every single problem is back, plus some more,
My mind is like an open door.
Fears wandering through my mind,
Making every dream a nightmare.
I really want to sleep sometime,
What youíve done to me isnít fair.
Why is it that even in the warmest clothes,
Iím still cold.
A hollow heart and an empty soul,
Crushing them was your only goal.
Yet thank you for making me this way.
Together, I had hope, a reason to continue on,
But Iím stronger now that youíre gone
Iíll show you what I can do without you,
My path is set, now its full steam ahead.
Are you happy now that youíve thrown it all away?
Iíve got a couple things to say,
Sold your soul,
And live alone in your misery.
With thousand of unfriendly faces,
In unfriendly places.
Hereís the kicker though,
Iím better then you could ever believe.
Itís all thanks to crushing my heart,
And tearing me apart,
That I can strive beyond you,
And even be happy.
Maybe itís wrong to feel this way?
I love the thought of you not being okay,
And I wouldnít want it any other way.
Please tell me what you guys think, thanks!