So I wrote some poetry lately and would like some feedback, so please tell me what you think of these. If I write more I'll post it in here as to not make like 5 different threads.
But, You
You say you want the world to change,
But you’re not willing to sacrifice.
You want us to make a rallying call,
But you don’t even show up.
You say you want me to care about you,
But you’ve already thrown your feelings out the window.
You tell me to stay,
But you threw that chance away.
You keep on thinking you’ll be a huge star,
But nobody even knows who you are.
You aren’t making it anywhere,
But you think you’re something special.
You keep creeping into my thoughts and dreams,
But you don’t deserve the starring role.
You keep thinking nothings changed,
But you’ve never been more wrong in your life.
Turning Too Fast
The world keeps changing,
And I disagree.
For me to like it,
It’ll cost quite the fee.
I don’t have a place in it,
But that’s really alright.
I’ll make my own way,
With pure will and might.
I’ll keep on living just in spite,
Sticking a thorn in the worlds path,
You couldn’t be any less right,
You think you can stop me? Don’t make me laugh.
A man once said, “I look at the world and notice it’s turning,”
Well he was on the right track.
I gave it all my heart,
Just be sure to give it back.
Time plays us all for fools,
It trickles by when you want it to go fast,
Memories begin to fade,
But quickness happens when you want it to last.
I’ve seen many things,
And I’m sick of them all,
The world keeps on turning,
And empires crumble and fall.
Is It Wrong?
Is it wrong that I miss you?
Is it wrong to say I’m okay when I’m not?
It’s been a month and I haven’t slept a wink,
All our time together, to forget it with a blink.
What I wouldn’t give for a second chance,
Or at least the next part of the first one.
I’m ready to pick up the shambles of my life,
But it was already like this before.
Is it wrong to want to see you?
Is it wrong to keep on believing things will be okay?
Every single problem is back, plus some more,
My mind is like an open door.
Fears wandering through my mind,
Making every dream a nightmare.
I really want to sleep sometime,
What you’ve done to me isn’t fair.
Why is it that even in the warmest clothes,
I’m still cold.
A hollow heart and an empty soul,
Crushing them was your only goal.
I blame,
Yet thank you for making me this way.
Together, I had hope, a reason to continue on,
But I’m stronger now that you’re gone
I’ll show you what I can do without you,
My path is set, now its full steam ahead.
Are you happy now that you’ve thrown it all away?
I’ve got a couple things to say,
Sold your soul,
And live alone in your misery.
With thousand of unfriendly faces,
In unfriendly places.
Here’s the kicker though,
I’m better then you could ever believe.
It’s all thanks to crushing my heart,
And tearing me apart,
That I can strive beyond you,
And even be happy.
Maybe it’s wrong to feel this way?
I love the thought of you not being okay,
And I wouldn’t want it any other way.
Please tell me what you guys think, thanks!
